lyric ideas - through a glass window

[icysk8r]

 I am releasing a concept album in 2010, and I want a single to be released before...  But if I release a part of the concept out of the context of the album, people will be confused, and turned off to my music.  Please give me feedback. Tell me what you think.  Especially analyze it, so I can see if I am getting the point across.  And make suggestions.  Well enough babbling, here it is.

Through A Glass Window
Collin Stover

Watching through a glass window,
impossible to break.
Confined behind this wall,
watching from the darkness.
Even if it shattered, would I dare move

Petrified, stricken with fear,
I want to walk out the open door,
But I’m throwing away the key

Watching through a glass window,
impossible to break.
Confined behind this wall,
watching from the darkness.
Even if it shattered, would I dare move

standing face to face,
 the window separates,
so close yet so far away.

Petrified, stricken with fear,
open door inviting,
yet I remain motionless.

Watching through a glass window,
impossible to break.
Confined behind this wall,
watching from the darkness.
Even if it shattered, would I dare move

*instrumental*

The light that surrounds me,
the darkness within,
I want to escape, but this is fate,
I’m back where I began.

Watching through a glass window,
impossible to break.
Confined behind this wall,
watching from the darkness.
Even if it shattered, would I dare move

Watching through a glass window,
impossible to break.
separated from the world around me,
watching from the darkness.
Even if it shattered, would I dare move

[icysk8r]

I posted the complete lyrics now.  tell me what you think and analyze them.  Please just take the time to do this, no one else is.

[petrucci07]

Good stuff, icy. Lots of metaphors, not quite sure what they mean though. Effectively used though. A few tips: Use less cliches (eg, "So close yet so far away" and "I'm throwing away the key". Also, I'd change that "Light that surrounds me" line, as it's a bit DT. Otherwise, good job, I look forward to the music

[icysk8r]

Good stuff, icy. Lots of metaphors, not quite sure what they mean though. Effectively used though. A few tips: Use less cliches (eg, "So close yet so far away" and "I'm throwing away the key". Also, I'd change that "Light that surrounds me" line, as it's a bit DT. Otherwise, good job, I look forward to the music

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