The Count of Tuscany Lyric Re-write

[pietro123]

I forgot I had this stashed away. Positive or negative, the lyrics to TCOT have been a popular topic over the past year. Because the song is so epic, dealing with an experience with a Count may not be the "best" idea for lyrics. I personally love the whole song as it stands, but hearing the music alone (especially the mellow guitar break) makes me think of deep philosophical ideologies. I am a Philosophy major anyway, so it probably comes natural. So here I present a re-write of the lyrics that I created on one boring day this past Christmas season. I followed the lyrical structure of the song very carefully, so the general outline is exactly the same, just with different words. I tried to have the same syllables as well, so I hope it came out well. So feel free to sing along to the lyrics with the instrumental version of TCOT. Lemme know what you guys think.


The Count Of Tuscany (Long Lost Truths)
Music: Dream Theater
Lyrics: Adam Pietrantonio

As I contemplate
My own existence
I have thought about
Timeless thoughts and long lost truths

Still I do not know
Why it is I’m here
Will I find the truth?
Solve the problems in my mind

Will there ever be
Truth that cannot lie
Can I rid
My mind and thoughts
Of all deceit

Maybe I will see
The error in my ways
Then I can begin to create my own truth

Let me analyze
The history of man
Searching high and low
Through ancient minds where knowledge grows

Conclusion I have come
The answer uncovered
I’ve known it all along
 Just unable to realize

Let me now explain
My future
It is not so good
Complete defeat
But there is still time
To change all this
Doubts and fears regroup
Divine rebirth

I-
Must now be aware
The doubts inside must now be faced
And confronted
I-
I must now become
Fearless of the challenges ahead

I-
Will now make sense again
The thoughts inside will now
Be laid and put to rest

I-
I will then be free
Free of all the tiresome questioning

Even though it seems
My journey’s now complete
I cannot be naïve
The search is barely underway

The truth that I do seek
Is difficult to reach
I lack what is required
To look within and face myself

Because it is inside
It has been all along
Courage must be found
To fight the demons of my mind

It has come down to this
Internal struggle rise
Rise to introduce
The fate of life and my own being

This will be the time
I will rise
Meaning will be born
And save my soul

Responsibility
For my mind
I will stand and fight
For clarity

I-
Must now be aware
The doubts inside must now be faced
And confronted
I-
I must now become
Fearless of the challenges ahead

I-
Will now make sense again
The thoughts inside will now
Be laid and put to rest

I-
I will then be free
Free of all the tiresome questioning

What if this is it?
Could this be all there is?
Sitting here confused
Regretting all I’ve done

Will I understand
Why it is that I am here
Will I ever find
The meaning of my life

What do I do now
A sense of guilt runs deep
I feel I’ve interfered
I stare into my mirror

I question who I am
The thoughts remain and I am speechless
Can I ever rid
My mind of all the doubts

“The truth is that you can’t
You are not the one
The one who knows it all
The purpose of this life”

“I ask that you don’t stop
The thoughts inside affect your mind
This is who you are
Strange although it seems
It will take you far”

The questions and the doubts
The days of constant thought
The fears and rays of hope
That I have always sought

“You wonder who I am
You ask that I reveal myself
The thoughts inside your mind
Ever since your youth
These are your long lost truths”

[ZKX-2099]

It's so much easier to critique than create.

[glaurung]

The lyrics are great as is. (haven't read your lyrics yet, will in a sec)

[Seventh Son]

Bleh, I suppose I'll be flamed because of my stance towards lyrics, but here goes nothing.

Don't really feel anything towards them. They're not terrible... but I just feel nothing from them. No offense, of course.

[Plasmastrike]

I don't think anyone will be offended by that stance.

Personally, when I listen to TCOT, there's no doubt that the lyrics could use some serious improvement. Although, they're not bad enough for it to actually be an issue (re: TBOT).

[ReaPsTA]

The Count of Tuscany is a bombastic emotional roller coaster ride of a song.

The lyrics you wrote are level-headed meditations on about man's place in the universe.

In fairness, the stuff starting from the acoustic section is okay. There are at least emotions in the song to tie into what the lyrics mean.

For the many flaws you can find in Petrucci's lyrics to the song, they match the music emotionally.

[MetalManiac666]

I've never found TCOT's lyrics to be that bad.  I would have to agree with Reap about the original lyrics matching the song emotionally quite well.  On the other hand, the last few stanzas of the OP are quite good.

[TL]

Though the lyrics to TCOT could certainly be better, the ones we have work in the context of it being a fun song.

[Rafael Guerra]

After listening for TCOT for over one year now, there's no way I can even imagine different lyrics.
Good attempt though, much better than something I could do.

[energythief]

I'm going to find the best Labrie impersonator I can, have him (her?) sing your lyrics over the instrumental mix, and listen to that exclusively. Perhaps then I can finally stomach the song.