Regarding the "my music player" line--which I also find grating and takes me out of the story--I wish not that they'd substitute another term (mp3 player/iPod, etc.) but that they'd make up some other term for what it'd be called in this other world. The stuff's futuristic, and you've got a lot of world-specific terms already, so what's another one? I think the line would be a lot easier to take seriously that way, and it would be another one of those things where you'd have to dig deep into things to figure out how it all connects. Heck, the music player thing already has that with "BUG." Why not extend it to what the device is called?
Really my only complaints regarding the album--other than the rather poorly-done sound effects--have to do with the elements of the story that have to do with music. There are a few places where they're just too cheesy, and I also don't get a great feel for how exactly the NOMACs tie in with the rest of the story. Generally, I don't really mind lyrics--all of DT's, even TBOT and TCOT,work fine in my opinion, except for these specific bits from TA. I do think this is one element where some internal pushback at JP might've been helpful. It sounds like--from what we know--the band just kind of went with what he had, and often one individual's creative vision needs at least a few bits of sanding and smoothing in a project of this sort of scope.