Hey man, there's a bunch of pretty cool ideas in here. Some of the passages are very
It could probably do with.....either some vocals (and a melody line) or some lead guitar or synth in a few spots, but still, I really like the composition quite a bit, especially the riff that kicks in right around the 4:30 mark. That's pretty banging.
The use of mellotrons is pretty nice too.
Guitar solo at around 5:30 is killer too
I really like the textures you've added with the keys and the lead synth lines are good, the only suggestion I think I'd have as you head into mixing it is turn those keyboards up, bro.
All in all, I think you've got something with a ton of potential here. Well done.