It was fine. I like that it was more structurally, dynamically, and tonally varied than the last piece you posted. However, you're still posting clips that are just too short to judge on a serious level.
Danny Elfman is a film composer, meaning that his music is generally meant to be accompanied by visuals and dialogue, or to take place during a title sequence or something. You do not have that luxury; the music you write has to hold the listener's attention without the aid of other media. So my suggestion is that you take the pleasant themes you have here and flesh them out into something substantial.